We have agreed, then, on waiting. I don’t have any suggestions
about that word in the brother poem. Not off-hand.
At the moment I still feel that leaving out “that” introduces a
hesitation/ambiguity that has no purpose, that only puts an impediment—
like a pebble in a shoe…but if you feel strongly you must leave it as
you wish.
One day the manuscript will not bomb!
Love as ever,
Don
[P.S. I like Paul very much!
In the fall, please send flat copies on
thick paper for Joey’s Autumn Campaign.]
